These are the 5 Commandments of Storytelling as outlined by Shawn Coyne in his book The Story Grid: What good Editors Know. These commandments can be found in all stories that really work.
Mr. Ainsworth is coming to woo Walker, threatening the relationship between the women
Walker has nightmares about Lister and hers relationship causing them harm by society
Does Walker continue her relationship with Lister or listen to the voices
Walker decides to leave Lister because she is worried they will be killed
Lister is crushed and returns to her house and is beat by a man hired by the Rawson brothers
A note on Value shifts. Scenes need to turn in order for a story to work, if it doesn’t turn in value then nothing is really happening. See the following two articles on value shift in scenes and stories at www.storygrid.com:
-/– hopeful to hopeless
Lister is heartbroken after Walker breaks up with her
+/- Secure to threatened
Lister is beaten and told to stay away from Walker, presumably because of her coal business
Obligatory scenes and Conventions are expectations the reader or watcher have when they watch specific genres.
For more information about the Story Grid, go to the Story Grid Webpage to find free videos and articles on how to implement the methodology.
For an example of how these techniques are used, read Jane Austin’s The Pride and the Prejudice with annotations by Shawn Coyne.
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