This post contains spoilers from the Amazon Prime television series Hanna, so make sure you watch the show before you read further.
Eric tells hanna about mother and experiment
Eric tells Hanna that her real father is alive and that he wants to see her
When Eric brings Hanna to her father, does she stay or go?
Hanna leaves to go find Eric
Eric is under attack and Hanna rescues him (very cooly taking out all the agents)
This value shift for the episode as a thriller shifts a couple times.
Hanna is semi-excited to meet her real father, so that starts positive, butte soon realizes she doesn’t belong there. +/- for that part.
Then she realizes that Eric has left her and she ends up rescuing him. I’d give that a -/+.
Hero’s All is Lost Moment, when he must change his approach in order to salvage some form of victory – I’d almost say that when Hanna is left with her father by Eric, that could be her all is lost moment, when she realizes she doesn’t belong, that she will never belong
Hero at the Mercy of the Villain – Too early yet.
Hero’s Sacrifice is Rewarded – Too early yet
Hero, Villain, Victim clearly defined – Hero – Hanna; Villain – Marissa; Victim – Maybe Hanna too? (To be determined)
The hero’s object of desire – stop the villain and save the victims
The Power divide between the hero and villain is very large – Hanna is alone, with only her father’s training; Marissa has many resources and men and an agency behind her
Speech in praise of the villain – To early yet, though Erik has warned Hanna that Marissa is dangerous.
The scene where Hanna rescues Eric is awesome, something that as a viewer I have been waiting – for her to kick ass. The anticipation about what Hanna and Eric are going to do with the girls in the training compound is interesting.
This is really working for me. Just enough of action, nothing to crazy, and good tension.
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