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Hanna – Episode 1
This post analyzes the Amazon Prime television series Hanna using the 5 Commandments of Storytelling and the Editor’s 6 Core Questions from the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
This post contains spoilers from the Amazon Prime television series Hanna, so make sure you watch the show before you read further.
The 5 Commandments for Episode 1
Inciting Incident
The inciting incident for this episode is when Erik steals Hannah from the hospital and tries to escape with Johanna.
Read MoreJack Ryan Conclusions – Does the Story Work?
This post analyzes the Amazon Prime television series Jack Ryan using the 5 Commandments of Storytelling and the Editor’s 6 Core Questions from the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
This post contains spoilers for the Jack Ryan television series, so make sure you watch it before reading on.
In Conclusion – The 6 Core Questions
So, we’ve reviewed the 5 Commandments for each Episode of Jack Ryan, and mentioned some of the Obligatory Scenes and Conventions along the way, but here is the complete 6 Core Questions based on Shawn Coyne’s book The Story Grid.
Once again, after reading a novel one time (or watching a series), an editor should be able to answer these 6 Core Questions without “having any serious head scratches”. These questions will help the editor determine where any problems are in the story.
Read MoreJack Ryan Episode 8 – Story Analysis
This post analyzes the Amazon Prime television series Jack Ryan using the 5 Commandments of Storytelling and the Editor’s 6 Core Questions from the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
This post will spoil everything about episode 8 from the Jack Ryan television series, so make sure you watch it before reading on.
The 5 Commandments for Episode 8
The Inciting Incident actually occurs at the end of the last episode.
Inciting Incident
The inciting incident for this episode is when Ryan realizes that Suleiman’s plan was to expose the President of the United States to Ebola through the rescued hostages.
Read MoreJack Ryan Episode 7 – Story Analysis
This post analyzes the Amazon Prime television series Jack Ryan using the 5 Commandments of Storytelling and the Editor’s 6 Core Questions from the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
This post will spoil everything about episode 7 from the Jack Ryan television series, so make sure you watch it before reading on.
The 5 Commandments for Episode 7
The first scene/ sequence begins with US intelligence forces analyzing the Suleiman’s location based on Hanin’s information.
Inciting Incident
The inciting incident for this episode when Dr. Kathy Mueller (Ryan’s girlfriend) briefs the military and CIA that the ebola infected body that Suleiman stole with his brother 6 months earlier could be weaponized. At this point, Ryan and the CIA think they know what the next terrorist event is, just not where or when.
Read MoreWriting Soldiers – Rifles used by the U.S. Army
This post will be the first in a series. The U.S. Army uses lots of different weapons for different reasons. This first entry will discuss the basic rifle that everyone uses.
The M4 Assault Rifle is the standard weapon currently used by the Army.
It is a shorter and lighter variant of the M16A2 assault rifle, which the Army still has in its inventory, though all combat troops are issued the M4. The M4 is a 5.56×45mm NATO, air-cooled, direct impingement, gas-operated, magazine-fed carbine. It has a 14.5 in (370 mm) barrel and a telescoping stock.
Vital Statistics:
- Cyclic Rate of Fire: 750 – 900 rounds per minute
- Muzzle Velocity: 2,970 ft/second (910 m/second)
- Effective Firing Range: 500 meters (550 feet)
- Feed System: 30 round magazine (20 and 100 round magazines available too, but normal Army magazines are 30)
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There are a number of scopes available to attach to the M4 via its Picatinny Rail system which will make it more accurate at farther distances, but they are not standard issue. The normal sites are called iron sites which consist of a front site post that can be moved up and down, and a rear site aperture that can be adjusted right and left.
There are a number of Accessories that are used by the military (though not in all units) to include: not vision scopes, telescopic scopes, laser pointers, bipods, larger and smaller magazines, grenade launchers, shotguns, and front front hand grips among others. The top of the rifle has a Picatinny Rail that is used to change out scopes and sites.
See this article for a full description of the Picatinny Rail system.
See the following YouTube video for details about the Picatinny Rail system.
The following image shows the progression of rifles in the US Army, from top to bottom, the M16A1, M16A2, M4, M16A4 (primary weapon for the US Marines).
The M16A1 was used at the end of the Vietnam war. Studies showed that US servicemen wasted ammunition by spraying bullets on automatic mode. After Vietnam, the Army adopted the M16A2 which did not offer an automatic mode, and instead used a 3 round burst. One of the biggest visual differences between the two rifles is the shape of the front hand guard: the M16A1 has triangular hand guards, and the M16A2 has round hand guards.
In the mid 1990s, the Army began to adopt the M4 rifle. They chose the M4 over the M16A4 because of the collapsible butt stock, which they believed helped soldiers in close quarter combat and also made the rifle lighter. The US Marines have adopted the M16A4 rifle.
There are still number of M16A2 rifles in the Army inventories, and many National Guard and Reserve Units still have them instead of the M4 rifles. Only a few regular Army units still use the M16A2 rifle, most have adopted the M4 Rifle.
If you have any questions or comments about Army rifles please submit below. Next week time we’ll discuss the other standard issue weapons for infantry unit such as machine guns, grenade launchers, and pistols.
Jack Ryan Episode 6 – Story Analysis
This post analyzes the Amazon Prime television series Jack Ryan using the 5 Commandments of Storytelling and the Editor’s 6 Core Questions from the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
This post will spoil everything about episode 6 from the Jack Ryan television series, so make sure you watch it before reading on.
The 5 Commandments for Episode 6
The episode begins 6 months in the past with Suleiman and his brother stealing an ebola infected body from a World Health Organization cemetery in Africa. Really, this could be the inciting incident for the Middle Build. I’ll break this down fully at the end of the series.
Inciting Incident
The inciting incident for this episode is Suleiman’s wife, Hanin, and her daughters trying to escape in a truck to the coast in order to get passage to Europe. The reason this is the inciting incident is that it is imperative for Ryan to get Hanin in order to stop the next terrorist attack. There is a couple countdowns at work here to: the window of time to get Hanin (before she is killed by Suleiman’s men or escapes to Europe never to be seen again) and the countdown to find information on the next terrorist attack before it occurs.
Read MoreS+SG: Editor’s 6 Core Questions/ Hero’s Journey – Mac and Windows
This post explains how to combine the software of Scrivener with elements of the methodology explained in the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
Warning: these tips and techniques work best with Mac computer loaded with Scrivener 3.0 or higher; most of this can be done on a windows machine, but there are some advanced functions that are not currently available on the windows version
The past episodes of the Scrivener meets Story Grid posts have included methods to build the Story Grid Spreadsheet using the Metadata function. If you have not read those posts, here are links:
- Using Metadata to track Story Grid Spreadsheet columns
- Tracking the 5 Commandments, Progressive Complications, and Narrative Drive
- Creating the Story Grid Spreadsheet
The Editor’s 6 Core Questions
Shawn Coyne describes the Editor’s 6 Core Questions as an indispensable tool to determine if a story is working. When I’m writing or editing a book, I like to map these out as I read through a draft of a manuscript, and this is how I do that.
Read MoreJack Ryan Episode 5 – Story Analysis
This post analyzes the Amazon Prime television series Jack Ryan using the 5 Commandments of Storytelling and the Editor’s 6 Core Questions from the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
This post will spoil everything about episode 5 from the Jack Ryan television series, so make sure you watch it before reading on.
The 5 Commandments for Episode 5
The first scene/ sequence begins with a chemical/biological team in protective suits opening the church door and discovering all the dead bodies and the device used to kill them.
Inciting Incident
The inciting incident for this episode is the Suleiman’s threat that ‘Paris is only the beginning’. This is definitely a threat of more terrorist attacks on the West.
Read MoreDavid Morrell’s First Blood (Rambo Book 1) – Analysis and Editor’s 6 Core Questions
I think it would be hard to argue that David Morrell’s book First Blood (Rambo’s first coming out) is not an action book. It definitely is. What might be surprising, to those that haven’t read the book, is how violent it is. In the movie, I believe there is only one death, the man that falls from the helicopter, and the rest are just injured or incapacitated. The novel, on the other hand, is a blood bath. And in the end, though I doubted myself at first (because who wants to go against Rambo), Rambo is the bad guy, the antagonist. He’s the guy going around killing police officers, civilians, and National Guardsmen. And despite what an asshole Sheriff Teasle is for setting Rambo off, in the end he is just trying to end the bloodbath.
The Editor’s 6 Core Questions
This post analyzes David Morrell’s novel First Blood using the Editor’s 6 Core Questions from the book The Story Grid by Shawn Coyne.
- Genre
- Obligatory Scenes and Conventions
- Point of View
- Object of Desire
- Controlling Idea/ Theme
- Beginning Hook, Middle Build, Ending Payoff
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